Consider yourself a writer; you are one, you know--you wrote a short story, one that could be published if it got hammered into shape.  So what do writers do with their work?  One thing is they ask for feedback from other people, so this is what we did today and what we will continue to do on Monday. 
First, in your notebook under the title of Revision Questions and Comments, make a t-chart of your story's strengths and weaknesses: what do you notice about your writing, whether its the story itself (character development, unclear flashback, etc.) or the mechanics of writing the story (indenting paragraphs, dialogue formatting, etc.)
Next, share your story with 2 other classmates, reading it out loud as they follow along on their Netbooks (which means you will have to electronically share your story with them so they can bring it up on their Netbooks).  
When you finish reading your story out loud, discuss your story with your colleagues and make a list in your notebook of the advice you received that you are going to use.